February 99 Winning Alternative Lyrics and Review

Staring out a dirty window 
On a cold November day 
Memories come creepin' in 
I wish I could wish away 
Amanda, you lived a lonely life 
With childhood adult fears 
I write your name in the dust 
Do you still cry silver tears 

Santa Monica's golden child 
A troubled daughter of the Stars 
Last time that I saw you 
Was near Crossroads in a bar 
Hiding your emotions 
Behind bloodshot emerald stare 
Nothing I could do to make you smile 
You were too stoned to care 
No one was there to steer you right 
To steer you right from wrong 
Amanda are you lonely 
Amanda where have you gone 

Chorus 
Your Oscar winning mom and dad 
Loved Metro Goldywn Mayer 
How could they ever give a damn 
Since they didn't even care 
Gave you their worst performance 
Your silver star never shone 
Amanda are you lonely 
Amanda where have you gone 
Amanda are you lonely 
Amanda where have you gone 

Another famous poor rich kid 
In a fish bowl full of lies 
Faking smiles for the paparazzi 
When you really only wanted to cry 
Acted like loving parents 
Who only loved the silver screen 
They were too busy for Rockabyes 
And let nightmares steal your dreams 

break 

Chorus 

Tag 
Amanda are you lonely 
Amanda where have you gone 
Amanda will you hold me 
Hope you hear my song 
 

    Composition 

    Flow 

            Emotion 

    Hooks 

    Music Ability 

These lyrics are written so well it sound like it could be a true story. I hope not. Good writing, like this, neither seems forced nor contrived. The thoughts flow easy and naturally, though the subject is an uncomfortable one. The use of "Amanda" in both the verse and chorus creates an effective hook. Check out the last line in the third verse; my favorite. I hear solo piano with soft background percussion. Maybe even a violin. Yes! A get your attention and make you think song.

Excellent writing Todd MacPherson, please let us hear more.