January 99 Winning Alternative Lyrics and Review

Strip away the layers 
One by one 
Separate the boys from the players 
Another shot of rum 
Cold black zipper heading south 
Universal language drips from your mouth 

Suddenly face to face 
With your shadow on the wall 
Time to leave this place 
Before your skin begins to crawl 
I caught the sign as you split the beads 
Time to tend to one's own needs 

Bridge: 
Here we go 
Here we go 
Here we go again 

Chorus: 
Parallel lines that cross in the night 
Put back on course by morning's light 
Right or wrong 
From dusk 'til dawn 
I'm all you need tonight 

Not the life you really wanted 
Aspirations so sublime 
Yet steadfast and undaunted 
You pay the price and do the time 
And all night long 
Our song plays on and on 

Bridge: 
Here we go 
Oh no 
Here we go again 

Chorus: 
Parallel lines that... 

I caught your sign as you split the beads 
Time to tend to our own needs 
Can't bite the hand that feeds 
My heart pounds while your heart bleeds 

I'm all you need tonight 
All you need, all you need 
I'm all you need tonight 
All you need to set things right tonight 
 

           Composition 

    Flow 

            Emotion 

    Hooks 

    Music Ability 

If you enjoy reading lyrics, this one's for you. Expressions like, verse 1 line 6 get your attention, while "split the beads" sounds comfortable and familiar. It's got a nice rhythm and catchy hook "Here we go". I can already hear the music for this one. I hear a rockish strong lead guitar, probably  male vocals and an active melodic bass. Aggressive drums would set the background nicely. Excellent writing and a good reminder that often good music follows well written lyrics.

Great job Paul J Radford, please send us more.