April 98 Winning Contest Lyrics and Review

It's a code 55 in the ER drive 
A man unarmed with just one arm 
Lock the doors, sound the alarm 
Screaming and yelling, in some crazed fit 
In a hospital gown flashing a bit 

The nurses have surrounded him, with needles in hand 
Watch it ladies, he's an unarmed, one armed man 
He's bleeding from his nose and he seems disillusioned 
and somehow he stubbed his toe in all this confusion 

He's malnutritioned, and he's got a bad rash 
Get dietary here and get me some neosporin fast 
Call his family in case we need a donor for him 
And get a cold pack for the bruise on his shin 

He's disoriented and dyslexic, and his heart rate is shallow 
This man is a mess, call Dr. Callow 
Get me a restraint, he needs surgery right away 
Pull out the gurney, it's an emergency I say 

Watch it people, he's uncooperative and combative 
He might need an enema or maybe a laxative 
He needs a morphine drip for the pain he's in 
and some oxygen now cause his breathe is thin 

Let's get him on the cutting board as fast as we can 
We need to help this unarmed, one armed man!! 
Hold him still while I give him this shot 
It'll settle him down so we can take him to op 

Okay, he's knocked out, calm as can be 
We need to document his vitals and things 
This medicine won't last long, let's make it quick 
And get ready to fight this unarmed, one armed man again! 
 

   Composition 

            Flow 

            Emotion 

    Hooks 

    Music Ability 

This looks like a ballad type of song. One of those "a day in the life...". There's a lot going on. I hope not too much. The lyrics certainly paint a picture of confusion and alarm. I suspect it is told from some sort of real experience. Wow! The music for this one will have to play a very important part in bringing some lightness and continuity. The vocals should probably present some sense of humor in them. Maybe by playing with/against the instruments. If the music is done well, this song could be an attention getter. 

Well done, WingDings, please treat us with more. 
 
  

How many days can this go on? 
It seems I just can't get a break. 
Since this all started 
The clouds haven't parted 
and the sun just won't stay awake. 

Chorus : 
So how do I live without you? 
The skies and me are so blue 
An umbrella can't hide 
What I feel inside 
There is rain in my heart over you 

This morning I thought today is the day 
my broken heart now will mend 
but you walked out that door 
just like before 
and the clouds began to roll in 

So how do I live without you 
the skies and me are so blue 
An umbrella can't hide 
what I feel inside 
there is rain in my heart over you 

So when will it end 
when do you intend 
to keep the promise you made 
to love me forever 
that's what you said 

When did your love start to fade 
You come and you go just like the rain 
leaving the pavement all wet 
But the flowers won't grow after you go 
if the sun doesn't shine on the bed. 

So how many days can this go on 
It seems I just can't get a break 
Since this all started 
The clouds haven't parted 
and the sun just won't stay awake 

How do I live without you 
The skies and me are so blue 
An umbrella can't hide 
what I'm feeling inside 
There is rain in my heart over you. 
Yeah 
There is rain in my heart over you. 
 

   Composition 

    Flow 

    Emotion 

            Hooks 

    Music Ability 

Please, Cindy, could we hear some more from you?