October 98 Winning Contest Lyrics and Review

What is law 
I hear them say 
An acronym 
To save the day 

We're in the club 
And  you know why 
Wanna make big money 
'Till we die 

chorus: 

LAW, is an acronym 
LAW, but don't tell them 
LAW, if your part of the club 
LAW, it's almost too much to luv 
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They got to come to ya 
It's a chinch 
They have to come to ya 
When their in a pinch 

We made it that way 
They ain't got a choice 
You know you gotta stay 
Better not raise your voice 

Chorus: 

Liar, liar 
Your pants are on fire 
The truth doesn't matter 
We're still for hire 

If you've got the money 
We'll be your mouth 
If you run out 
We'll just take your house 

It ain't right or wrong 
Not what it's about 
If you've got the cash 
We'll get you out 

Chorus: 
 

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These lyrics made me laugh! Inside "the club" stereotyping provides a humorous perspective. Our worse fears or best expectations? There is no end to what can be said about Lawyers. I can here this song in clubs, as well as at the firm's picnic. Intellectually simple but clever. The chorus is a sing along. The vocals are probably in the foreground/background (or echo) style. The music is mostly rhythmic, medium tempo. Horns could add a big sound! The words are the message here.

Thanks for the missive A. Nonymous now, please draft us some more. 
 
 
 
 

Through tears and a cracked rear-view 
Been told but I never really knew 
What you can't see is right in front of you 
Jamming the brakes only to continue 

Cursing you, you and yellow lines 
Killing the lights I drive blind 
Looking back I'd be wasting time 
Out of sight and out of my mind 

I am lost and you led the way 
Driving alone in my Chevrolet 
Covering the tracks your lies made 
Take me forever and a day 

Wishing now my car didn't start 
I turned a corner and fell apart 
Danger on the road with a broken heart 
No you, no traffic, no spare parts 

Baby I know what to do for you 
Believe them lies,yeah make them true 
No. Paint my Chevy a crazy blue 
I'm alright, that alright with you? 
 

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Bravo! These lyrics have so many memorable lines I enjoy reading them each time. "Danger on the road with a broken heart" is my favorite. Writing to a theme can be difficult. It inherently places restrictions on the process, but is good practice. This writer has no obvious problems meeting this challenge. The music would be fun and melodic. Possible acoustic guitar with a good drum beat. I can hear a tenor sax playing sort of jazzy in the back ground. Piano, maybe some light piano! We're definitely keeping our eyes on this writer.

Way to go virginia now, please send us some more. 
 
 
 
 

 He pulls out of the parking lot 
 All his girls wonder where he goes 
 He decides he  better give me a shot 
 Leaving behind his plastic hoes 

     hes had 16 tries 
     they all were lies 
     every one- yes 
     Every-single-one 
    He thinks he can lay me down 
    After all this time 
 And now hes standing outside my door 
After all this time 
And i sit here weeping on the floor 
After all this time 
Little did i know 
He was ready to go 
Here he comes 
Here he comes 
Why can't he just leave me once 
This never-ending sea of doubt 
has got me so down low 
 

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It's not easy writing lyrics to fit an already defined melody and phrasing. Try it and you'll see! This is a good job for a particularly challenging melody. We promise to chose easier ones in the future. Thanks for the lyrics and for being brave enough to accept the challenge.

That's the way JAnis16 , we want some more.