September 98 Winning Contest Lyrics and Review

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These winning lyrics were written by: H. Jones
Jerry had a little spam 

Jerry had a little spam 
it's mold was white like snow 
and everywhere that Jerry went 
The smell was sure to go 

It followed him to work one day 
Along the bag he'd take 
And all the workers in the place 
All knew who's face they'd break 

He opened up his bag at lunch 
As all the faces turned 
when he bit into his food 
and all the eyelids squirmed 

Frequently his innards ached 
and all the town knew why 
cause of that moldy moldy spam 
poor Jerry did surely die 
 

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This review written by LyricsReview.com judge:  Figaro
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    13           Total Score
Lyrics:  Jerry had a little spam
Author: H. Jones
 

Judges Comments:

Well done! This is our first Rewrite - it contest winner. Bravo! Though you don't have to imagine how the melody goes, it is still a good challenge to come up with clever words and phrasing. We laughed ourselves silly on "Frequently his innards ached". I can't wait to see more from this writer and I hope others will give it a shot. Thanks for the fun laughs.

Way to go H. Jones now, please send us some more. 
 
 
 
 

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