December 98 Winning Folk Lyrics and Review

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These winning lyrics were written by:  Robert Kvinnesland  (c)1998
I Didn't Stay 
 
There was a time I met a woman 
And we hit it off okay, 
We shared a place and some affection, 
But when I came home one day 
She'd actually nailed my Carolinas 
Into the hardwood floor, 
As if those boots gave cause to wander, 
And I should somehow love her more... 
I didn't stay. 

[chorus 1] 
I couldn't say, although I wondered 
As I walked over to the door: 
Is this the way that God intended, 
And what my parents raised me for? 
As if I'd drawn the role of Judas, 
In some pathetic Passion Play, 
Between the sting of accusation 
And how she carried on that way... 
I didn't stay. 

There was a time I worked in Nashville 
With the fortunate and few, 
I lucked into a staff position 
And I judged a song or two. 
But every barroom had its martyr, 
Every office had its mask, 
And all the drinks and pretty smiles 
Were favors waiting to be asked... 
I didn't stay. 

[chorus 2] 
I couldn't say, although I wondered 
As I walked over to the door: 
Is this the way that God intended, 
And what my parents raised me for? 
As if I'd drawn the role of Pilate, 
In some pretentious Passion Play, 
Between the pain of feigned politeness 
And canned replies throughout the day... 
I didn't stay. 

Now the years have been collected 
With indifference to the game, 
Other jobs and other women 
Being pretty much the same. 
I've seen no Satan nor a Savior, 
Nothing worthy of the name, 
No place or love that ever made me 
Sorry afterwards to claim: 
I didn't stay. 

[chorus 3 - finale] 
I couldn't say, but will I wonder 
Until I face that final door: 
Is this the way that God intended, 
And what my parents raised me for? 
As if I'd drawn the role of soldier 
In the eternal Passion Play, 
Casting lots for ragged garments 
Just to pass the time away. 
Neither wiser, nor repentant, 
Ever afterwards to say: 
I didn't stay. 

 

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This review written by LyricsReview.com judge:  R. Peggio
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    15           Total Score
Lyrics: I Didn't Stay 
Author: Robert Kvinnesland 

Judges Comments:

Those of you who wish to improve your lyric writing take heed: Robert's "I Didn't Stay" reads like a lesson in an How to Write a Great Song class. I suggest you go to school on this one! Check out how the first and second verses about walking away from a woman and a job are neatly summed up in the third verse - how each chorus is slightly different to match the verse and how they evolve to nicely finish the song. This is a sophisticated piece of work! We can all learn something from this one.

Excellent,  Robert Kvinnesland , please, send another! 
 
 

 

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