April 99 Winning Other Lyrics and Review

Leaving on a Greyhound, 
may I sit in back? 
I see my mothers eyes still pierce 
and beg me to come back 
A million stars were out 
but all I saw was black 
I played my goodbye song, 
the ropes that bound me suddenly went slack 

Am I so alone? 
Am I so alone? 

Midwest fortune came in signs of vacancy 
Midnight desk clerk - 
bigots eyes that question me 
cold and empty stares from men 
who call this place their home 
Beneath their graves are chests of treasures 
spent on drying bones 

Chorus 
And through their windows 
they see fortune growing nowhere 
Through their childrens lives - 
a fate to carry on 
From a breakfast table 
mothers thoughts go somewhere 
far from this bitter land they walk upon 

Thirteen hundred miles left 
500 left behind 
Empty bottle, inside ticker starting to unwind 
A warm and worn out blanket 
for deeds I left in check 
I close my eyes and wake up 
to find my blanket wet 

And through their windows 
they see fortune growing nowhere 
Through their childrens lives - 
a fate to carry on 
From a breakfast table 
mothers thoughts go somewhere 
far from this bitter land they walk upon 

Memories and hardened roads 
are all I call my friends 
Dusty boots, forgotten routes 
that seem to never end 
Nearer to a shade tree 
I will find my solace yet 
A goodbye song I sing too long 
but one I won't regret 

And through their windows 
they see fortune growing nowhere 
Through their childrens lives - 
a fate to carry on 
From a breakfast table 
mothers thoughts go somewhere 
far from this bitter land they walk upon 
 

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These are very interesting lyrics. They are thought provoking and expressed in a unique style. There is a sense of contemplative deepness and reflection; a story being told by the experience of it. The imagery in these lyrics is well developed and shows real talent. I hear this one as a kind of sad ballad. A recounting of the long journey life sometime gives us. The music for this one should be as deliberate and thoughtful as the lyrics. There is a great opportunity here to compliment the words with a powerful sound. 

Nicely done, David, I can't wait to see more from you.