November 98 Winning Other Lyrics and Review

Each day in the shower 
As I reach for the Soap 
I know I will drop it 
I feel like a dope 

It seems predestined 
As I start to reach 
The tub screams "in coming" 
The germs hit the beach 

Where is my balance 
My poise and my grace 
I wish for a grip 
So I don't have to chase 

Chorus: 

This big bar of Soap 
Why is it so heavy 
The shelf is too high 
And it dives like a chevy 
: 

Straight down it hurtles 
Straight down far below 
A perfect trajectory 
To land on my toe 

If I move quickly 
I might risk a fall 
My footwork's improving 
But Soap hits them all 

The pain is terrific 
Surprisingly so 
A discolored nail 
Soap's trophy to show 

chorus: 

One day it will miss me 
The torture will end 
When Softscrub takes over 
As my new best friend 
 

      Composition 

      Flow 

              Emotion 

      Hooks 

      Music Ability 

A song can often benefit from a catchy title. You know, one that makes you think. Here, the title is the hook!  I really enjoyed these lyrics. They are a lot of fun. I can easily imagine the early morning battle with "Soap." I like the way the soap takes on a persona. I hear kind of a jazzy sound with a clarinet dancing in and out of the back ground. A faster tempo with brushed drums would sound nice here. I think a strong melodic bass would even out the sound. Possibly a light piano providing the rhythm could be nice. Funny and good! 

Great writing SAM, please, will you send us some more?