January 99 Winning Rock Lyrics and Review

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These winning lyrics were written by: Dan Diehl
Clock of Doom

Swirling through the slice of life that scares the cat away
A young man falls into himself one cold November day.
He sees his wrinkled fathers hands entwined into his own,
His life lay now before him, both vast and all alone.

CHORUS:

Clock of doom keeps ticking on
Its hands behold our fate.
Passing by are days gone by
Tommorrow is too late.
Today is now tommorrow 
Of yesterdays ago.
We bide our time in silly rhyme
With conflicts we all know.

Lost his way again it seems, he's fallen through the cracks
Spinning wildly like a top his past fires all come back.
Running blind through blackened fog two arms flail in the night
Searching for some concrete thing to make everything all right.

Years keep passing by his face a window to his soul
He looks around his meager world a pit within a hole.
Confusion grips his failing mind that wheezes with each breath
The only thing that drives him on is the certainty of death.

REPEAT CHORUS
 

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This review written by LyricsReview.com judge:  Forte'
Score:

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      Flow 

      Emotion 

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      Music Ability 



    14           Total Score
Lyrics: Clock of Doom 
Author: Dan Diehl

Judges Comments:

           In Clock of Doom the chorus exhibits nice word play and performs well in sumation and to tie the song together. But I think the real strength here is  in the  verses.   Dan's form of expression really stands out, eclectic, yet not too arcane to lose us. See line 3 in verse 1 and line 2 in the last verse. Not your typical lyrics! Ths is well thought out and well written. Nice!
 
 

Good song, Dan,  please submit more! 
 
 

 

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