May 99 Winning Rock Lyrics and Review

I try so hard to get home to you, 
I see you waving there, help my feet to move... 

And I pray someday, I'm the man you'll need 
You'll return to me... 

They say in this world every heart's alone, 
But, I'm on a mission girl to find my way home... 

And I pray someday, your heart will see 
And you'll return to me. 

All those years I carried on 
I had no love to lean upon, 
But in your eyes I see we're one, 
And I'm trying, hon', to be the man you need. 

I see you waiting there arms open wide, 
I hear you call my name on the longest night... 

And I pray someday, I'm the man you'll need 
And you'll return to me... 
You'll return to me 
 

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           One of the best things about Michael's lyrics is his choice of words. For example the title and phrase 'Return to Me' would have been written as 'Come Back to Me' by the vast majority of authors. He also shines in his choice of rhyming words, not limiting his expression to 'perfect' rhymes, using instead 'family' rhymes, in this case mostly 'voiced nasals.'*  This is something at which we should all work. 
 
 
Nicely done, Michael,  please send us another! 
 
* 'Writing Better Lyrics' Pat Pattison Ch. 3