November 98 Winning Rock Lyrics and Review

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These winning lyrics were written by:  Virginia Canfield
~The Present~

My parting gift is today this is the present
Wrapped in ribbons of realistic views
Been asleep for so long I forgot I knew
I didn't have to be awake to see right through
This self-induced coma since I met you

I woke up this morning doing way better than you
Rather wake up baby then just come to
Awareness came from some where in between
Slipping out of a trance right into this scene

Laughing out loud like its some kind of game
When you swore on the bible it burst into flames
You looked at me eyes glaring with blame
Asking me why things cant stay the same
Leaving I said nothing is constant but change

I woke up this morning doing way better than you
Rather wake up baby then just come to
You can't say your sorry, its too late
Sleeping Beauty woke up, yeah she's awake
 

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This review written by LyricsReview.com judge:  Forte'
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    14           Total Score
Lyrics: ~The Present~
Author: Virginia Canfield



Judges Comments:

You lyricists out there who want to improve your craft, read these lyrics. Virginia's subtle use of double meanings, her fresh treatment of this much belabored subject, and her rather clever lines culminate into a unique and very enjoyable writing style. The vivid imagery of her 11th line made me laugh out loud!

Excellent, Virginia Canfield,  please send us  more.
 
 

 

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